The subordinating-style sentence I’ve chosen to analyze comes from chapter seven of F. Scott Fitzgerald’s most famous novel, The Great Gatsby, published in 1925. It can be found on page 124 and reads as follows:
Over the ashheaps the giant eyes of Doctor T.J. Eckleburg kept their vigil, but I perceived, after a moment, that other eyes were regarding us with peculiar intensity from less than twenty feet away.
To put things in context a bit, in this sentence Nick Carraway, the narrator of the tale, has just realized that he—along with Tom Buchanan and Jordan Baker—is being watched by someone in the apartment over George Wilson’s garage. The “other eyes” that he perceives belong to Myrtle Wilson: George Wilson’s wife and Tom Buchanan’s mistress.
The sentence begins with “the giant eyes…of T.J. Eckleburg” which show up time and time again in the story, and act as the metaphorical ‘eyes of God,’ which passively observe the characters’ sins and exploits. Although it is unnerving, it should come as no surprise that Eckleburg’s eyes are watching Carraway and his company—after all, they always are. But through Carraway’s perception we find out that Eckleburg’s eyes are not the only ones watching.
The phrase “but I perceived” acts as a hinge between the two parts of the sentence. It is this phrase that subordinates the first portion of the sentence (“Over the ashheaps…kept their vigil”). After those three words the focus of the sentence swings around and reveals to us a pair of eyes that will turn out to be more far important than Eckleburg’s are. The phrase that stands between the hinge and the reveal, “after a moment,” is also subordinate, although it is less so than that first clause. That “moment” is the pause before the curtain is opened, and the audience on the edge of their seats (an audience already unnerved by the God-like omnipresence of Eckleburg) sees the truth of the situation. It acts as a brief pause in the action, a breath to convey the moment of time that it takes the narrator to notice the second, and arguably more important, set of eyes.
And Myrtle’s eyes are more important, if not in the grand scheme of the novel, then at least in that one brief moment. And Fitzgerald clues his audience in to this with little phrases. “[P]eculiar intensity” stands out at first, as an intense stare probably should; if Myrtle were “regarding” the group in any other way it might not be so striking for the reader, but her gaze is intense enough to make Carraway notice—and even take him by surprise. Then, just as the sentence is coming to a close, Fitzgerald emphasizes the importance of the “other eyes” by making the reader aware of their proximity. While Eckleburg’s eyes are far away, in the background, Myrtle’s eyes are “less than twenty feet away.” Her eyes are intruding, intense, and now very close, and so the danger, importance, and urgency they pose to Nick Carraway and his company are highlighted.
And really, this is where all the trouble begins. After the “other eyes” are revealed to be Myrtle Wilson’s, the audience also discovers that she is staring at Jordan Baker, who she believes to be Tom Buchanan’s wife. This misunderstanding will eventually lead to the climax and denouement of the novel, in which Myrtle Wilson meets a tragic demise (as does another character who will remain unnamed). This sentence, really, is the hinge of Fitzgerald’s novel. It does a lot of work, and does it breathlessly, in one brief, blink-of-an-eye moment.